Wednesday, July 13, 2011

How do you like my Writing...Advice welcomed . Thanks?

I think the beginning sounds a little superficial and clique, honestly. Maybe you could mention what she loves about her husband to make her leaving him seem more upsetting, because right now, I don't feel her pain as she leaves. It needs to be more believable for the rest of it to matter and make sense.

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